Zhaneel2006-10-23 04:59:56
It seems that I have lost what little creativity I had, I have been attempting for days now to rewrite my description with no success. I wrote my current one when my character was 16, I haven't really played Lusternia since then (until now) and my character is now 38.
She is a ferocious loboshigaru and has a slight figure, covered in bristles of dusty-golden fur. Blackened across most of her frame, strong ebon points dapple the golden pelt, augmenting the thick texture. Gauntly built, her elongated limbs maintain an adolescent presentation and large paw-like hands hold a surprising hint of dextrous grace. Malar-markings of a darker gold bleed across her sharp countenance with the soft-edged appearance of newly shed tear tracks, streaks of color which intensify her amber eyes. Small, alert ears hide in a thick mane, which falls across her shoulders and down her spine to a constantly moving tail. Cropped to reveal her narrow features, elegant braids interweave within her coat, accentuated by tiny wood-carved beads.
If anyone could lend my some advice, it would be greatly appreciated. (Note that I may be changing race soon, though which race that is remains a debate between Human, Furrikin, Mugwump and Faeling).
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She is a ferocious loboshigaru and has a slight figure, covered in bristles of dusty-golden fur. Blackened across most of her frame, strong ebon points dapple the golden pelt, augmenting the thick texture. Gauntly built, her elongated limbs maintain an adolescent presentation and large paw-like hands hold a surprising hint of dextrous grace. Malar-markings of a darker gold bleed across her sharp countenance with the soft-edged appearance of newly shed tear tracks, streaks of color which intensify her amber eyes. Small, alert ears hide in a thick mane, which falls across her shoulders and down her spine to a constantly moving tail. Cropped to reveal her narrow features, elegant braids interweave within her coat, accentuated by tiny wood-carved beads.
If anyone could lend my some advice, it would be greatly appreciated. (Note that I may be changing race soon, though which race that is remains a debate between Human, Furrikin, Mugwump and Faeling).