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by Evette

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Evette2008-07-08 08:16:02
Something I think you might find funny. To finish it or not is the question..


Transfixed, bedazziled, and green. Here I stand, forsaken by the Elder Gods. Their punishmet seemingly fit, "You are to become a plant for a total of seven months" they all say in unison. Put back into the rightful world I find that I am no longer able to move, to speak, to breathe. I am stuck, the only thing my body is able to do is maybe rustle a bit.

Month one of my green experiance:
Sleep didn't come to me at all this month, by bones ache from staying in the same position, and I am forced to watch my friends, familiy, and foes walk past me as their string of fate is sparred from being cut. I try to reach out to those that I love, but trying to do so, all I end up doing is perhaps rustling a bit. I am sure that my movements go unnoticed, as I have threwout my life. Perhaps they wonder about me, maybe even worry. Such sad thoughts ring threwout my head as the days and nights slowly pass me by. Eventualy I acheive a meditative state, what would be my body going numb and my mind ignoring the fact that I cannot close my eyes. Somethings that I was holding, now nested within my branches, begin to decay upon me. The ooze from this proccess making its way to my inner most branches. I want to roll around on the ground to get it's stench off of me, to sooth it's liquid itch.
Fania2008-07-09 18:34:03
It's very interesting so far. I'd be interested to hear about this shrubs past life and why it got such a punishment. It a nice start, I'll be interested in seeing what you do with it.
Doman2008-07-09 23:01:18
Good, but you have a lot of spelling errors
Shaddus2008-07-09 23:18:57
QUOTE(Doman @ Jul 9 2008, 06:01 PM) 530669
Good, but you have a lot of spelling errors

And you flirt with random novices. Leave the girl alone, lucky she isn't trying to type with branches wink.gif
Doman2008-07-09 23:26:42
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Daganev2008-07-10 00:13:37
Very nice idea...

However I would suggest writing it as someone talking to themselves, (possibly someone somebody being able to hear the thoughts. maybe a druid?) rather than a diary...
Evette2008-07-10 03:30:41
QUOTE(Doman @ Jul 9 2008, 06:01 PM) 530669
Good, but you have a lot of spelling errors


Isn't it a common known fact that I can't spell worth anything yet? Yeesh people, stop expecting so much!! tongue.gif

QUOTE(Shaddus Mes @ Jul 9 2008, 06:18 PM) 530682
And you flirt with random novices. Leave the girl alone, lucky she isn't trying to type with branches wink.gif


I don't have branches crying.gif

QUOTE(daganev @ Jul 9 2008, 07:13 PM) 530728
Very nice idea...

However I would suggest writing it as someone talking to themselves, (possibly someone somebody being able to hear the thoughts. maybe a druid?) rather than a diary...


The only problem with that is Evette dosen't talk to herself, perhaps to the trees a little bit but thats it. I wanted to make it seem more like a diary because it would be easiest to understand, not to mention I wanted to add an element of comedy in there. (note this starts in month two) I think I might finish it tonight, seeing as how Evette's back tomorrow, if I get bored enough. I just dont know how to bring it up IC.