Shadows

by Unknown

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Unknown2005-06-24 17:43:38
Ivory skin that kisses the night
Awash in temptations and somber light
Once more evokes the inquiry's hold
Where neither answer nor question is told

Mystery after mystery plague the leaves
That wrestle for larger territories
With the catalyst- the winter breeze
And the blind are the ones who see

Laughter from the mad-men gone sane
Caresses the fabrics of the daughter's shame
Her gown of blood stretched far and wide
While martyr she pretends with quiet lies

Several eyes haunt this hall
From pictures of spring and fall
And shadows- they dance with sadistic glee
While the whispers seduce the plea

A hammer held high like a suffering scream
Crashing down with judgement's glee
Drowning Justice and her sister- Epiphany
Until their voices are no more this eve

The sunset basks the coming pain
Like a sadist and masochist set free
And lips roam the valleys of your skin
Pretending they love- while they hate within

Once more, the dagger is held high
In morbid prayer of the night
And yet when dawn arrives- her hands of gold
Release only ghost tales from ages ago

And they whisper, "Shadows."
Crylia2005-06-24 22:52:39
One word: Wow wub.gif
Unknown2005-06-25 06:14:58
My applause on a very excellent poem. I did notice, though, the rhyme scheme got a little off towards the end. Not that it really matters towards the overall imagery of the story (even three year olds can--and are quite fond of--rhyme). What does matter is that it is very entertaining.
Unknown2005-06-25 06:45:24
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Unknown2005-06-25 16:37:54
Thank you all for your input. It really helps that some of my work captures the attentions of readers. As for the rhyme scheme, however, I followed the Gregorian Rhyme scheme often used in epic poetry in the late 16th century. I also did a play on some hikau that I had read the other day by Lui Yung-Mao, a talented girl who, according to her bibliography, has followed Osip Mandelstam's writing technique for a while. I would keep on eye on her, if I were to give my opinion to the writing community. She has a certain "movement" in her writing that suggests greatness.
Erion2005-06-25 18:25:09
As everything else you produce, I love it. It's beautiful! And it reminds me of Wheel of Time, for some reason.