The voices I hear they are my own reflection,
In this pool, of tears
The walls around me made of stone
protection, From my fears
The echoing truth rings in my head
returning, From my lies
The blinding frustrations of word once said
Still burning, in my eyes
(Chorus)
A shout in the dark echoes through these halls
But Im undiscerning, and yet I am turning
The sound of my past catching up to me
I try to forget it, and yet I regret it
The rhetoric of my heart cries out
Im searching for answers, Growing like cancer
Breaking these chains that would bind my soul
It's coming full circle, with one final hurtle, just you..

A voice in the crowd cries out for peace,
unable,In this world of monotone
The light of the world begins to cease
Disabled, and left all alone,
(Chorus)
A shout in the dark echoes through these halls
But Im undiscerning, and yet I am turning
The sound of my past catching up to me
I try to forget it, and yet I regret it
The rhetoric of my heart cries out
Im searching for answers, Growing like cancer
Breaking these chains that would bind my soul
It's coming full circle, with one final hurtle, just you


(First off, it all right to post this here? Or do things here gotta be strictly lusternian)
Feedback!

Things here are supposed to be strictly Lusternian, but no one seems to care about that and I can't tell the difference between regular poetry and Lusternian poetry, since they don't even bother with overt references usually, so no one will bother to correct anyone who goes wrong there.

What's got into you lately, Shiri? Eesh.

Nice jaerb, Diamante!

Hmm? I wasn't in a bad mood when I made that post IIRC. What's wrong with it? Just a comment. Most of the poetry here isn't IC, and no one really minds it, so it doesn't get fixed even if I could easily tell the difference between poetry that's about Lusternia and poetry that isn't.



That's what I was responding to, if you missed that or something...

It's another bitchy post from you.

Been seeing all too many lately.

Stop it.

Our little Shiri is growing up.

Ahhh, I see. It doesn't actually apply to this post at all, just the one I wrote yesterday, where you called me an "assmonger" and sent me the most hilariously hypocritical tell instructing me to "grow up." And now you're looking for excuses. Got it.

Wrong, it applies to this post just as much.

I'm sorry for the lack of "oomph" in my insult. Rest assured that were not the censor rules so tight on this board I would have come up with better.

You do need to grow up. Badly.

I was actually kidding when I said Shiri is growing up. He is one of the more mature people on these forums, Ceres.

meh, I just wanted feedback, not for everyone to hate each other *sniffle*

feedback, I like it, even though it's non-lusternia related, hehe