For my new character Tynghall, I made the following description. (and I think I ripped off something Arix put when he was a Lucidian. Or someone else...I know I ripped SOMEONE off, though)

I was just enjoying that description, actually. Hope you don't extend it.

The other thing you might want to steer away from is using clothes in your description. There are a large number of clothes you can buy that fit what you're trying to say, as slightly risque as it is.

Do shadowsinger faelings change like shadowcaster and shadowlords do?

@Kante: It sounds good by itself! ...or maybe that's just me having a hard time putting together lucidian descriptions. I don't know how you guys do it.

Inion - Like Iwiertas pointed out, you can buy clothing of the sort that's indicated, so it's possible to steer away from including clothing in your description without sacrificing the essence of it. Nothing else really stands out that you haven't pointed out yourself, other than the 'squirming veins of genuine moss.' It sounds (to me, at least) like the veins are actively moving over her wings, which is a little strange. I did a quick rewrite of it, with both the original and your own comments for it in mind.



Feel free to edit or otherwise use (or not use!) my rendition as you see fit!

I'm new to Lusternia and I was trying to be, racially/RP-ly correct from what I understand thus far.
Dracnari Ninjakari.

How's this? I didn't know what else to tack on to the end since you didn't supply much, so feel free to add on or edit what you like.

She is a fierce dracnari and holds herself proudly, yet she is not without an air of subtlety. Slitted eyes of the deepest black ceaselessly take in her surroundings in quiet observation while intricate patterns of blue and black paint decorate her verdant scales, distorting her appearance and blending her into any surrounding shadows. Jagged yellow spines travel down her neck and back, down her forearms and to the tip of her serpentine tail. The rest of her lithe figure is distinctly humanlike.

Ha, I was going to say something about the clothing but then I was swept away by the new description and forgot.

The veins of moss moving was exactly what I imagining. Is that impractical? It could be just the illusion of constant movement, I suppose. Oh, and intimate is the perfect word to use- I really should have thought of it.

Reid- Shadowsingers have a change of stats, but not appearance, I believe.

I'd think it's entirely practical. Whenever you moved your wings, the veins would move, creating that illusion.

I was just wondering because it sounded a little strange to me, but it makes sense now! You can always replace my edit with the original phrasing if you want to convey that impression.

Great, so I'll aim for movement when I gather the courage to touch the description. Squirming now sounds like kindergarteners with worms though... writhing is a little done... shifting, perhaps. Thanks for the help.

Ravai- Figured I'd have a go for fun, though I'm a terrible newbie. I would suggest just a little blurb on her personality to help. I borrowed a little from Reid though, I hope that's okay.



She is a fierce dracnari and observes her surroundings with a dignified bearing. Her dark, slitted eyes, slight snout and strong tawny tail, forearm and neck spikes are evidently Dracnarian, for all that her lithe physique indicates human ancestry. Her olive scales are split by dark blue and deep black gashes, allowing the edges of her form to melt away into the background.

He is a sinuous undead illithoid and he stands 5 feet tall. His body is quite slim, yet strong and athletic. His skin seems moist and almost black with some purple hues. Covering all of his body, blue veins palpitate in a harmonious beat. His circular mouth is full with yellow spiny teeth.

My description sucks. Can anyone pimp it out?

If anyone could prettify this description, I would really appreciate it!

Corinthian - I stumbled a bit with this because the original didn't mention eyes, and I like to play facial features off one another. But here's my take, do with it what you will!


Serella - Yay Trill! I tried to suggest the cool and refined aspect instead of stating it, but pardon the rather clumsy phrasing. >_< Again, do with it what you will!

I used to mention eyes in my previous incarnations, which have always been light blue eyes. (I was a Celestian Trill and Merian on my first incarnations of Orti) I didn't mention eyes on Orti as an Illithoid on purpose. And he's sneaky, so you at most will see his mouth

However, you rock, and you win +5 internet cookies

Thank you- it's lovely!

I have taken Bhiele out of dormancy, and was wondering if you all would help me to liven up her description a bit please? This was written in haste after I wanted to change her hair up a long long time ago. (I know my spelling and grammar are probably off too, feel free to correct me!) Thanks!



She is a nimble shadowsinger faeling and is tiny and lithe, a mere wisp of feminine grace. Her coloring is fair, so pale that her skin appears faintly blue in the moonlight. Frail, ragged wings rise from between her shoulder blades their color ameliorating in tenebrous shades of blue, violet and grey. Her small angular face is defined by a delicate bone structure, creating sharp lines and hollows of her cheekbones and brow. Widely set almond shaped eyes are alight with an amber fire, a molten gold surrounded by curling black lashes. Closely cropped curls frame her face like an ebony cap, each spiral twisted artfully to dance upon her head as she moves. Her mouth is bow shaped, too wide and full lipped to be considered a thing of beauty.

She is a nimble shadowsinger faeling and is tiny and lithe, a snapshot of feminine grace captured in a mere wisp. A fair complexion, pale as new snow, causes her skin to glow a flickering blue in the moonlight. Almost as wispy as herself, frail and ragged wings extend from her back, surrounding her form with a halo of colour. Tenebrous shades of blue, violet and grey flow across the wings like ocean currents, almost never seeming the same twice. With wide almond eyes alight with the amber fire of interest and framed by her dark curling lashes, she gazes out from a small angular face. An almost fragile bone structure gracefully covered by cascading dark curls makes all her movements a personal dance, drawing attention away from her hollow cheekbones. Resting under the sharp lines of her nose and cheekbones, a bow shaped mouth finishes the picture, wide and full-lipped.

It's really a rewrite, but you had quite a lot of nice phrases in there which I felt loathe to break up.

I quite like that! You captured what I was trying to. She is frail and delicate, but not necessarily beautiful. I think I'll change it when I can log in to do so!

Wrong. All shadow faelings have a changed appearance, even those (like me!) that are statistically normal faelings.

How much of that you actually include in your description depends on the person.