Mikalia2008-09-26 19:18:35
I'm fairly new here, opinions would be muchly appreciated:
She is a nimble shadowcaster faeling and is quite a petite young lady, even for
her race. She has fair skin which gleams a polished, porcelain hue, devoid of
any color save for the rosy blush upon her high cheeks, full, tender lips and
the few scattered freckles around her nose. Large eyes of a deep, viridian and
jade twinkle mischievously at you from behind long dark eyelashes, the
silver spots within, which twinkle from time to time, are reminiscent of the
twilight sky of evening. Flowing locks of soft black hair fall freely over her
shoulders and back in a cascade of delicate curls. Her body is slim and svelte,
contrasting with her sultry and substantial curves, yet showing off her care for
fitness. Flitting about her lithe figure is a pair of dark wings, resembling
those of a butterfly with mauve swirls running through them in an intricate
pattern.
She is a nimble shadowcaster faeling and is quite a petite young lady, even for
her race. She has fair skin which gleams a polished, porcelain hue, devoid of
any color save for the rosy blush upon her high cheeks, full, tender lips and
the few scattered freckles around her nose. Large eyes of a deep, viridian and
jade twinkle mischievously at you from behind long dark eyelashes, the
silver spots within, which twinkle from time to time, are reminiscent of the
twilight sky of evening. Flowing locks of soft black hair fall freely over her
shoulders and back in a cascade of delicate curls. Her body is slim and svelte,
contrasting with her sultry and substantial curves, yet showing off her care for
fitness. Flitting about her lithe figure is a pair of dark wings, resembling
those of a butterfly with mauve swirls running through them in an intricate
pattern.
Unknown2008-09-26 19:31:37
QUOTE(Mikalia @ Sep 26 2008, 03:18 PM) 562938
I'm fairly new here, opinions would be muchly appreciated:
She is a nimble shadowcaster faeling and is quite a petite young lady, even for
her race. She has fair skin which gleams a polished, porcelain hue, devoid of
any color save for the rosy blush upon her high cheeks, full, tender lips and
the few scattered freckles around her nose. Large eyes of a deep, viridian and
jade twinkle mischievously at you from behind long dark eyelashes, the
silver spots within, which twinkle from time to time, are reminiscent of the
twilight sky of evening. Flowing locks of soft black hair fall freely over her
shoulders and back in a cascade of delicate curls. Her body is slim and svelte,
contrasting with her sultry and substantial curves, yet showing off her care for
fitness. Flitting about her lithe figure is a pair of dark wings, resembling
those of a butterfly with mauve swirls running through them in an intricate
pattern.
She is a nimble shadowcaster faeling and is quite a petite young lady, even for
her race. She has fair skin which gleams a polished, porcelain hue, devoid of
any color save for the rosy blush upon her high cheeks, full, tender lips and
the few scattered freckles around her nose. Large eyes of a deep, viridian and
jade twinkle mischievously at you from behind long dark eyelashes, the
silver spots within, which twinkle from time to time, are reminiscent of the
twilight sky of evening. Flowing locks of soft black hair fall freely over her
shoulders and back in a cascade of delicate curls. Her body is slim and svelte,
contrasting with her sultry and substantial curves, yet showing off her care for
fitness. Flitting about her lithe figure is a pair of dark wings, resembling
those of a butterfly with mauve swirls running through them in an intricate
pattern.
Looks good to me! Manages to convey beauty without seeming mudsexish
Valarien2008-09-26 19:33:55
I have to echo Kial on this one - I like it!
Mikalia2008-09-26 19:37:55
Thanks guys
Sarrasri2008-09-26 19:52:29
*watches her desc be ignored except by Hal*
Unknown2008-09-26 20:01:51
QUOTE(Sarrasri @ Sep 26 2008, 03:52 PM) 562965
*watches her desc be ignored except by Hal*
Too short! Add more detail! Otherwise it's fine
Sarrasri2008-09-26 20:03:24
Not...what I wanted. The request is to have someone else re-write it.
Rika2008-09-26 20:18:26
Lazy! Even I, who can't write to save myself, wrote Rika's.
Shurimaru2008-09-26 20:20:30
How do you think I feel, Sarrasri?
No one thinks that Shirleymaru is cute...
v.v
No one thinks that Shirleymaru is cute...
v.v
Aison2008-09-26 21:45:51
QUOTE(Lendren @ Aug 31 2008, 03:33 PM) 552421
I have always done this in all my characters in all MUDs. Sometimes just for changing moods. Though my current character is a changeling illusionist who genderbends sometimes, so I have so many descriptions I have a database to store them, instead of just a bunch of aliases!
My suggestion: having aliases is great but sometimes you want to just add a little something to the end to account for something temporary and situational. For instance, you've just been gorging on strawberry tarts, but you don't want to edit your alias (or make a new one) to show a smudge of jam on your cheek. Still, you want to show it, and have it be easy. So just add something to the end of the alias that lets you specify "extra" description when you run the alias, like so:
The %-1 on the end is zMUD lingo for all the extra words on the command line. (Other clients will use other syntax.) Now if you type:
descdirty There's a smudge of something that might be strawberry jam on his cheek.
People will see your usual description plus that extra. Always put something extra that shows what's going on most recently, and people might even get in the habit of looking at you. (Don't count on it though.)
My suggestion: having aliases is great but sometimes you want to just add a little something to the end to account for something temporary and situational. For instance, you've just been gorging on strawberry tarts, but you don't want to edit your alias (or make a new one) to show a smudge of jam on your cheek. Still, you want to show it, and have it be easy. So just add something to the end of the alias that lets you specify "extra" description when you run the alias, like so:
CODE
#alias descdirty {describe self and is covered in filth. His figure is gaunt from malnourishment; his ribcage clearly visible under a thin layer of pallid skin. His flesh is pasty and pockmarked where it is visible under the thick grime which covers his body. The hair upon his head is black and shines from grease, and it crowns a narrow face which borders on skeletal. Two slightly sunken eyes peer out from under his matted fringe. His shoulders and back are covered in flea bites; the creatures are occasionally drop from his body.  %-1}
The %-1 on the end is zMUD lingo for all the extra words on the command line. (Other clients will use other syntax.) Now if you type:
descdirty There's a smudge of something that might be strawberry jam on his cheek.
People will see your usual description plus that extra. Always put something extra that shows what's going on most recently, and people might even get in the habit of looking at you. (Don't count on it though.)
Lendren, I always read your descs when I see you .
Aison is also in need of a makeover, sometime soon...
Shaddus2008-09-26 21:58:39
QUOTE(Aison @ Sep 26 2008, 04:45 PM) 563008
Lendren, I always read your descs when I see you .
Aison is also in need of a makeover, sometime soon...
Aison is also in need of a makeover, sometime soon...
Pigtales?
Aison2008-09-26 21:59:08
No, she's too old for that stuff.
Casilu2008-09-26 22:01:47
QUOTE(Aison @ Sep 26 2008, 02:59 PM) 563013
No, she's too old for that stuff.
Beehive.
Aison2008-09-26 23:53:15
You are so right on with that request.
Shaddus2008-09-27 00:01:51
And perhaps... horn rim glasses? Hot librarian style?
Sthai2008-09-27 01:36:20
QUOTE(Sarrasri @ Sep 26 2008, 01:40 AM) 562680
She is a crystalline lucidian vernal ascendant and stands at 5'8" with a nicely
toned body. When the sun hits her form she glows a pale blue with rare glances
of sea-green while her long, crystal hair is a shimmery silver. Her bright, gold
eyes are stunning, showing her emotions with ease. Drawing your gaze slightly up
and away from her eyes is a blue crescent moon drawn on her forehead, outlined
with yellow tint.
toned body. When the sun hits her form she glows a pale blue with rare glances
of sea-green while her long, crystal hair is a shimmery silver. Her bright, gold
eyes are stunning, showing her emotions with ease. Drawing your gaze slightly up
and away from her eyes is a blue crescent moon drawn on her forehead, outlined
with yellow tint.
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She is a crystalline lucidian vernal ascendant and stands at average height for
her race. Slender limbs of blue-hued crystal move with eerie grace that raise occasional
undertones of green and deeper sky-blue as light refracts within her form. Silvery hair
falls in straight, glimmering lines about her unusually expressive face, coming to mid-back
in a cascade of rainbow-tinted hues. A crescent moon, indigo in shade, rests above piercing
golden eyes, surrounded by a somewhat smudged outline of yellowtint.
her race. Slender limbs of blue-hued crystal move with eerie grace that raise occasional
undertones of green and deeper sky-blue as light refracts within her form. Silvery hair
falls in straight, glimmering lines about her unusually expressive face, coming to mid-back
in a cascade of rainbow-tinted hues. A crescent moon, indigo in shade, rests above piercing
golden eyes, surrounded by a somewhat smudged outline of yellowtint.
Casilu2008-09-27 03:27:56
QUOTE(Shaddus Mes @ Sep 26 2008, 05:01 PM) 563053
And perhaps... horn rim glasses? Hot librarian style?
She is 66 years old, having been born on the 20th of Vestian, 151 years after the Coming of Estarra.
I guess you have a thing for old people, I see her more as a that REALLY old librarian in the library. The one that can read Egyptian because she was raised on it type.
Aison2008-09-27 03:51:36
QUOTE(Shaddus Mes @ Sep 26 2008, 05:01 PM) 563053
And perhaps... horn rim glasses? Hot librarian style?
QUOTE(casilu @ Sep 26 2008, 08:27 PM) 563112
She is 66 years old, having been born on the 20th of Vestian, 151 years after the Coming of Estarra.
I guess you have a thing for old people, I see her more as a that REALLY old librarian in the library. The one that can read Egyptian because she was raised on it type.
I guess you have a thing for old people, I see her more as a that REALLY old librarian in the library. The one that can read Egyptian because she was raised on it type.
She isn't that old, gosh.
She does need a different appearance, once I get her outfit made.
Kelysa2008-09-27 03:57:07
Every time I see life in this thread I feel like showing off my own desc again. Vain.
Saaga2008-09-27 18:31:20
... possesses an air of mystery and reservation. Tall and willowy, yet remarkably angular, this woman carries herself with subtle grace. Long, fine boned arms end in slender hands and ink-stained fingers, her skin is being of a very pale, translucent complexion that appears almost grey or blue. Geometric tattoos inked in deepest blue and dusted lightly with sapphire adorn her limbs and torso, forming acrane symbols from the Tree of Life. Silvery white, silky hair falls straight down her back, swept back from an angular face of extremely delicate bone structure. High cheeckbones and a thin, finely chiseled chin on an emotionless face compliment a pair of crystal clear eyes, the hue of which changes from the gentle purples of dawn to the eerie blues of dusk, depending on the mood their owner. Slightly purple lips are often pursed together in thought; pearly-white teeth flash briefly as her lips part. Several small sapphires and colourless crystals are woven into this woman's silvery hair in pearly thread. A translucent, blue-gray veil partly conceals the lower part of her face as well as some of her hair, bringing out her mysterious eyes.
HALP! Saaga will soon become a human and I can't describe her! I want her to be lucidian-esque; tall, angular and mysterious. Not beautiful in a traditional sense..
HALP! Saaga will soon become a human and I can't describe her! I want her to be lucidian-esque; tall, angular and mysterious. Not beautiful in a traditional sense..