Unknown2009-03-14 03:46:32
She is an ordinary human and is about 5'10" tall. She appears to be an "old
human", showing no traits of any other race. Her skin is a peachish type color
and is somewhat tanned. Her red hair is drawn back in a long foxtail which
reaches down to her middle back, although her forehead is entirely covered with
her bangs. Her bright blue eyes are always partially closed as if constantly
drowsy or tired. Her athletic build can be misleading and at a distance it is
difficult to tell if she is either a somewhat feminine looking male or a
somewhat masculine looking female.
Any improvements? I'm open to suggestions
human", showing no traits of any other race. Her skin is a peachish type color
and is somewhat tanned. Her red hair is drawn back in a long foxtail which
reaches down to her middle back, although her forehead is entirely covered with
her bangs. Her bright blue eyes are always partially closed as if constantly
drowsy or tired. Her athletic build can be misleading and at a distance it is
difficult to tell if she is either a somewhat feminine looking male or a
somewhat masculine looking female.
Any improvements? I'm open to suggestions
kiriwe2009-03-14 03:58:30
QUOTE (Fireweaver @ Mar 13 2009, 11:46 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
She is an ordinary human and is about 5'10" tall. She appears to be an "old
human", showing no traits of any other race. Her skin is a peachish type color
and is somewhat tanned. Her red hair is drawn back in a long foxtail which
reaches down to her middle back, although her forehead is entirely covered with
her bangs. Her bright blue eyes are always partially closed as if constantly
drowsy or tired. Her athletic build can be misleading and at a distance it is
difficult to tell if she is either a somewhat feminine looking male or a
somewhat masculine looking female.
Any improvements? I'm open to suggestions
human", showing no traits of any other race. Her skin is a peachish type color
and is somewhat tanned. Her red hair is drawn back in a long foxtail which
reaches down to her middle back, although her forehead is entirely covered with
her bangs. Her bright blue eyes are always partially closed as if constantly
drowsy or tired. Her athletic build can be misleading and at a distance it is
difficult to tell if she is either a somewhat feminine looking male or a
somewhat masculine looking female.
Any improvements? I'm open to suggestions
Personally, I don't like to see numbers in descriptions, because it interrupts the flow.
Also, either she is 5'10" or she isn't. If it's approximate, make it an approximate height, not so specific. If she is exactly that height, make it exact.
Xenthos2009-03-14 04:04:45
QUOTE (Kiriwe y'Kaliath @ Mar 13 2009, 11:58 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Personally, I don't like to see numbers in descriptions, because it interrupts the flow.
Also, either she is 5'10" or she isn't. If it's approximate, make it an approximate height, not so specific. If she is exactly that height, make it exact.
Also, either she is 5'10" or she isn't. If it's approximate, make it an approximate height, not so specific. If she is exactly that height, make it exact.
Humans don't come in 1" increments.
I would actually speculate that the odds of being exactly 5'10" are pretty slim.
Unknown2009-03-14 05:15:59
QUOTE (Kiriwe y'Kaliath @ Mar 13 2009, 03:46 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
oo~
do me do me!
She is a glistening undead mugwump and is rather short. Mottled grey and black skin graces her pudgy form, her youthful shape losing out to her prominent belly for being the most noticeable curve on her body. A thin coating of slime protects her tender skin, causing any and all clothing she wears to become damp. Her fingers and toes are webbed, the thin skin a translucent greyish pink. Thin, greyish white hair falls past her shoulders in carefully styled curls, the ends tickling her shoulderblades. Two large, garish pink bows are tied into her locks, small bells stiched in the center of each, the excess ribbon trailing almost as long as her hair. Her features are flat, but her large murky emerald eyes seem to pop out, lending her an amphibian appearance.
do me do me!
She is a glistening undead mugwump and is rather short. Mottled grey and black skin graces her pudgy form, her youthful shape losing out to her prominent belly for being the most noticeable curve on her body. A thin coating of slime protects her tender skin, causing any and all clothing she wears to become damp. Her fingers and toes are webbed, the thin skin a translucent greyish pink. Thin, greyish white hair falls past her shoulders in carefully styled curls, the ends tickling her shoulderblades. Two large, garish pink bows are tied into her locks, small bells stiched in the center of each, the excess ribbon trailing almost as long as her hair. Her features are flat, but her large murky emerald eyes seem to pop out, lending her an amphibian appearance.
I would offer some constructive criticism if I had any, but I cannot think of a way to make it better. Very well written description!
Unknown2009-03-14 05:16:01
Edit: sorry for double post.
Kiradawea2009-03-14 10:00:21
QUOTE (Kiriwe y'Kaliath @ Mar 13 2009, 10:46 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
oo~
do me do me!
She is a glistening undead mugwump and is rather short. Mottled grey and black skin graces her pudgy form, her youthful shape losing out to her prominent belly for being the most noticeable curve on her body. A thin coating of slime protects her tender skin, causing any and all clothing she wears to become damp. Her fingers and toes are webbed, the thin skin a translucent greyish pink. Thin, greyish white hair falls past her shoulders in carefully styled curls, the ends tickling her shoulderblades. Two large, garish pink bows are tied into her locks, small bells stiched in the center of each, the excess ribbon trailing almost as long as her hair. Her features are flat, but her large murky emerald eyes seem to pop out, lending her an amphibian appearance.
do me do me!
She is a glistening undead mugwump and is rather short. Mottled grey and black skin graces her pudgy form, her youthful shape losing out to her prominent belly for being the most noticeable curve on her body. A thin coating of slime protects her tender skin, causing any and all clothing she wears to become damp. Her fingers and toes are webbed, the thin skin a translucent greyish pink. Thin, greyish white hair falls past her shoulders in carefully styled curls, the ends tickling her shoulderblades. Two large, garish pink bows are tied into her locks, small bells stiched in the center of each, the excess ribbon trailing almost as long as her hair. Her features are flat, but her large murky emerald eyes seem to pop out, lending her an amphibian appearance.
It's nice. Except the bows. You're not always gonna wear those bows so you might consider removing that. Other than that it's pretty good.
Mihewi2009-03-14 15:49:33
QUOTE (Kiradawea @ Mar 14 2009, 05:00 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
It's nice. Except the bows. You're not always gonna wear those bows so you might consider removing that. Other than that it's pretty good.
She is always going to wear the bows. They are permanently stitched in. Sewed them into her creepy scalp at birth. Just consider them to be a part of her hair.
Saaga2009-03-15 11:28:40
Saaga
She is an ordinary human and possesses an air of mystery and reservation. Tall and slender, pale quicksilver hair cascades down her back, swept neatly back from her brow to compliment a pair of crystal clear eyes, the hue of which changes from the gentle purples of dawn to the eerie blues of dusk according to the mood of their owner. The eyes are set in breathtakingly sculpted features: a swan-like neck carries a delicately angular face and high cheekbones. Full lips, often pursed together in thought, are brushed lightly in purple and part to briefly display pearly white teeth as she speeks. Her arms are long and willowy, pale flesh kissed with iridescent sapphire stains that glitter in arcane arabesques that curve and whorl, as if with meaning. Minute sapphire and onyx gemstones sparkle like hidden stars, pinning her hair neatly away from the face.
The drawing is how I see my character, but I would like to have the description reflect the picture more. As I am not as good with words as I am with colours (though I have much to improve still etc etc), I request help! Help the poor creature!
PS. I need to add "well-kept eyebrows" somewhere too.
She is an ordinary human and possesses an air of mystery and reservation. Tall and slender, pale quicksilver hair cascades down her back, swept neatly back from her brow to compliment a pair of crystal clear eyes, the hue of which changes from the gentle purples of dawn to the eerie blues of dusk according to the mood of their owner. The eyes are set in breathtakingly sculpted features: a swan-like neck carries a delicately angular face and high cheekbones. Full lips, often pursed together in thought, are brushed lightly in purple and part to briefly display pearly white teeth as she speeks. Her arms are long and willowy, pale flesh kissed with iridescent sapphire stains that glitter in arcane arabesques that curve and whorl, as if with meaning. Minute sapphire and onyx gemstones sparkle like hidden stars, pinning her hair neatly away from the face.
The drawing is how I see my character, but I would like to have the description reflect the picture more. As I am not as good with words as I am with colours (though I have much to improve still etc etc), I request help! Help the poor creature!
PS. I need to add "well-kept eyebrows" somewhere too.
Elostian2009-03-15 12:22:15
You went human?
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
Saaga2009-03-15 13:57:24
QUOTE
You went human?
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
Before joining Glom, you blind God. (I am sorry if this means that you'll need to update some things!)
Also, Saaga is turning more and more lucidian-esque every day! (This may cost me a dagger of reincarnation some day, gasp!) Now be a good Elostian and help me with my description crisis?
Kante2009-04-14 17:40:48
All right, I could use a bit of help. Generally, my descriptions are pretty good, but as of late, I've been lazy as all hell and the words aren't flowing, so assistance is required. I basically want to fine-tune my current description. Make everything flow better, etc. etc. In general, the look I'm going for is barbarian-esque, so the beard and long hair stay. Feel free to play around with other aspects, however.
He is an ordinary human and stands at approximately six feet in height, his pale white skin stretched over his muscular, lithe frame. Stone gray eyes glare out at the world around him, carefully observing his surroundings. Two braids of ill-kempt, sable coloured hair are positioned strategically on both sides of his face and the rest of his hair falls somewhat haphazardly to his shoulders in the back. A large, full beard of the same colour adorns his face, hanging down to about the middle of his chest. Around his chin, two braids are made from the coarse and blood-stained hair, which perch carefully atop the rest of his beard.
He is an ordinary human and stands at approximately six feet in height, his pale white skin stretched over his muscular, lithe frame. Stone gray eyes glare out at the world around him, carefully observing his surroundings. Two braids of ill-kempt, sable coloured hair are positioned strategically on both sides of his face and the rest of his hair falls somewhat haphazardly to his shoulders in the back. A large, full beard of the same colour adorns his face, hanging down to about the middle of his chest. Around his chin, two braids are made from the coarse and blood-stained hair, which perch carefully atop the rest of his beard.
Unknown2009-04-20 11:53:32
I could need help in rephrasing Miryh's description if anyone is free. I'm going for the snow fox or the slightly ferocious kitsune wolf kind of look. 
I only have one tail though. Hahah.
She is a ferocious loboshigaru and has a pair of striking almond-shaped, snowy whites encircled around raven black irises. Her cold eyes are even more emphasized with the dark thick lines that runs along her lower eyelids down to the sides of her jaw line. Her face is rather humanoid, with strong, dignified features. The bridge of her nose are, however crinkled, causing her features to take on a milder then normal Loboshigaru but ferocious look. Lips of dark bluish black adorns long canines that juts out a little. Large and tall wolfen ears of white sits at the sides of her head. Long wavy locks of light red adorns her crown. A long lithe and shapely body, covered with snowy white fur which runs down to her distinctively marked tail. A long thick black lines runs down her tail length, accompanied by perfect small red eight circles, four each are spaced widely from each other on either side of that line. Unretractable claws of ebony upon her slim humanoid fingers and feet, her hands are however a little scarred from harvesting, hunting and writing.
I only have one tail though. Hahah.She is a ferocious loboshigaru and has a pair of striking almond-shaped, snowy whites encircled around raven black irises. Her cold eyes are even more emphasized with the dark thick lines that runs along her lower eyelids down to the sides of her jaw line. Her face is rather humanoid, with strong, dignified features. The bridge of her nose are, however crinkled, causing her features to take on a milder then normal Loboshigaru but ferocious look. Lips of dark bluish black adorns long canines that juts out a little. Large and tall wolfen ears of white sits at the sides of her head. Long wavy locks of light red adorns her crown. A long lithe and shapely body, covered with snowy white fur which runs down to her distinctively marked tail. A long thick black lines runs down her tail length, accompanied by perfect small red eight circles, four each are spaced widely from each other on either side of that line. Unretractable claws of ebony upon her slim humanoid fingers and feet, her hands are however a little scarred from harvesting, hunting and writing.
Saaga2009-04-20 12:46:37
QUOTE
She is a ferocious loboshigaru and has a pair of striking almond-shaped, snowy whites encircled around raven black irises. Her cold eyes are even more emphasized with the dark thick lines that runs along her lower eyelids down to the sides of her jaw line. Her face is rather humanoid, with strong, dignified features. The bridge of her nose are, however crinkled, causing her features to take on a milder then normal Loboshigaru but ferocious look. Lips of dark bluish black adorns long canines that juts out a little. Large and tall wolfen ears of white sits at the sides of her head. Long wavy locks of light red adorns her crown. A long lithe and shapely body, covered with snowy white fur which runs down to her distinctively marked tail. A long thick black lines runs down her tail length, accompanied by perfect small red eight circles, four each are spaced widely from each other on either side of that line. Unretractable claws of ebony upon her slim humanoid fingers and feet, her hands are however a little scarred from harvesting, hunting and writing.
How about this?
QUOTE
She is a ferocious loboshigaru and studies her surroundings coldly with a pair of strikingly almond-shaped, snowy white eyes set off by thick, dark lines that encircle the eyes and run from her lower eyelids to her jawline in an inky black flow. Her face displays more than a bit of human heritage with strong, dignified features framed by long, wavy locks of light red hair and contrast starkly with a crinkled nose bridge and wolfish ears covered in short, white fur. A thick line of black runs the length of her tail, accompanied by eight immaculate, red circles; four on each side. Ebony claws extend from her slim, humanoid fingers and feet, the fingers scarred from hunting, harvesting and other activities.
Kraz2009-04-20 14:28:49
I wouldn't mind getting some help.
He is a bouncing furrikin and looks like a bat. Short tan colored fur covers his entire body, with head fur, which is short and uncombed, is a slightly darker color. His eyes are a deep golden color and are slitted, much like a cats. His head has a foxish look to it and does not contain the normally seen 'nose leaf' that most bats have. His ears are large, and always always twitching as the pick up nearly every sound around him. He only has three actual fingers on his hands, the other two are long and extended, with a membran on them forming his armwings, which extend all the way to his shoulders, and down to hips. His tail is longer and fluffier than average for a bat and has a lighter cream color on the bottom side. His footpaws look slightly like hand, having the look that they'd be good for gripping, and have a white pad on the bottoms. His nose is also white.
Even have a pic of what he's supposed to look like:
http://img9.imageshack.us/img9/8730/124002...impressivek.jpg (though he's not wearing those clothes, since I accidently crafted the wrong robes).
He is a bouncing furrikin and looks like a bat. Short tan colored fur covers his entire body, with head fur, which is short and uncombed, is a slightly darker color. His eyes are a deep golden color and are slitted, much like a cats. His head has a foxish look to it and does not contain the normally seen 'nose leaf' that most bats have. His ears are large, and always always twitching as the pick up nearly every sound around him. He only has three actual fingers on his hands, the other two are long and extended, with a membran on them forming his armwings, which extend all the way to his shoulders, and down to hips. His tail is longer and fluffier than average for a bat and has a lighter cream color on the bottom side. His footpaws look slightly like hand, having the look that they'd be good for gripping, and have a white pad on the bottoms. His nose is also white.
Even have a pic of what he's supposed to look like:
http://img9.imageshack.us/img9/8730/124002...impressivek.jpg (though he's not wearing those clothes, since I accidently crafted the wrong robes).
Razenth2009-04-21 02:56:54
Did you draw that?
Unknown2009-04-21 20:07:58
He is a menacing orclach and his hulking frame is covered in gray skin. Crimson markings adorn his body, some distorted by scars and healing wounds. His rough face is framed by mutton chops, two longs tusks brushing past his over lip. His eyes are a pale hazel, his sable hair bound in heavy dreads adorned with bones.
Can it survive?
Can it survive?
Unknown2009-04-21 23:52:07
QUOTE (Kraz @ Apr 20 2009, 10:28 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
He is a bouncing furrikin and looks like a bat. Short tan colored fur covers his entire body, with head fur, which is short and uncombed, is a slightly darker color. His eyes are a deep golden color and are slitted, much like a cats. His head has a foxish look to it and does not contain the normally seen 'nose leaf' that most bats have. His ears are large, and always always twitching as the pick up nearly every sound around him. He only has three actual fingers on his hands, the other two are long and extended, with a membran on them forming his armwings, which extend all the way to his shoulders, and down to hips. His tail is longer and fluffier than average for a bat and has a lighter cream color on the bottom side. His footpaws look slightly like hand, having the look that they'd be good for gripping, and have a white pad on the bottoms. His nose is also white.
He is a bouncing furrikin and sports short tan fur that darkens imperceptibly from the neck up. Large triangular ears, sprouting outward from his skull, twitch at the slightest sound. A white nose tips the end of a narrow fox-like muzzle that slopes gently towards slitted eyes of a dark amber hue. Slim arms end in three fingers each, two of which are narrow to dull points. A thin, semi-opaque membrane of skin stretches between his fingers and body, extending from his shoulders to his hips. His feet, covered in dark fur save for the white pads on the bottom, appear like hands, gripping the material of whatever he stands upon. A long, fluffy tail, tan on top and a creamier colour underneath, nearly touches the ground.
QUOTE (Vena @ Apr 21 2009, 04:07 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
He is a menacing orclach and his hulking frame is covered in gray skin. Crimson markings adorn his body, some distorted by scars and healing wounds. His rough face is framed by mutton chops, two longs tusks brushing past his over lip. His eyes are a pale hazel, his sable hair bound in heavy dreads adorned with bones.
He is a menacing orclach and towers menacingly, his hulking frame further broadened by muscle and sinew. Wicked tusks jut from his jaws and curve upward, eyes of pale hazel glaring fiercely past them. His skin, a dull grey, helps accent the swirling crimson markings that crawl over his form, marred by a multitude of scars and half-healed wounds. Sable hair frames his rugged face in unkempt mutton chops and sprouts from his skull in thick, heavy dreadlocks decorated with small bones.
Unknown2009-04-22 19:31:08
QUOTE (Ried @ Apr 22 2009, 01:52 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
He is a menacing orclach and towers menacingly, his hulking frame further broadened by muscle and sinew. Wicked tusks jut from his jaws and curve upward, eyes of pale hazel glaring fiercely past them. His skin, a dull grey, helps accent the swirling crimson markings that crawl over his form, marred by a multitude of scars and half-healed wounds. Sable hair frames his rugged face in unkempt mutton chops and sprouts from his skull in thick, heavy dreadlocks decorated with small bones.
*glomp*
<3 you and this desc. Thank you!
Navaryn2009-04-22 19:56:38
'menacing orclach' and 'towers menacingly' are kinda redundant...
Unknown2009-04-22 19:57:02
I just realized how redundant the first eight words are. 
