Descriptions!

by Valarien

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Unknown2009-06-27 13:37:57
QUOTE (Kialkarkea @ Jun 27 2009, 09:31 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
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How can we tell this just from determined looking eyes.


Well, there's the "and" that separates one idea from another in that sentence.
Xenthos2009-06-27 14:07:32
QUOTE (Allison @ Jun 27 2009, 09:37 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Well, there's the "and" that separates one idea from another in that sentence.

I believe the question is more, "How can we determine this just by looking at her"? Especially if it is not related to the eyes at all.
Unknown2009-06-27 14:38:15
QUOTE (Xenthos @ Jun 27 2009, 10:07 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I believe the question is more, "How can we determine this just by looking at her"? Especially if it is not related to the eyes at all.


I don't know. It seemed kind of short to me so I just wanted to fluff it out a little. I don't see how implying a few metaphysical things is fine as long as you don't go into agonizing detail about completely non-physical things.
Unknown2009-06-27 14:45:05
@Scuttles

I finished it... but it sorta... well, very much creeps me out... >_<


He is an ordinary human and is quite tall, standing a little above six feet in height. His arms and legs are awkwardly long, even with the consideration of his height. His lank body stands slightly slouched, his skin unnervingly stretched out over his body as his bones strain against it. Tufts of ginger hair puff out from his head, sticking out of place in a mess with its straw like appearance. His small, squinted eyes are a clouded grey, aligned perfectly well with his sharply angled face. Below his eyes, his crooked nose rests splashed with a liberal amount of freckles. A stubble of light orange encircles his sloped mouth, the tint not far from that of the hair on his head.
Mirami2009-06-27 15:26:30
QUOTE (Allison @ Jun 27 2009, 07:38 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I don't know. It seemed kind of short to me so I just wanted to fluff it out a little. I don't see how implying a few metaphysical things is fine as long as you don't go into agonizing detail about completely non-physical things.


it's the whole "I'm LOOKing at you, not searching your soul/mind/capability" deal.
Also, even if it's short, it's OK- my description is still unfinished, because I've been too lazy to finish it- it's a whole three lines at the moment. Short is fine!
Shaddus2009-06-27 15:32:28
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He is tall and his wife thinks he's fat, though he thinks he's just right. He carries himself with an aloof dignity because his priest said he was going to Celestia. Last week he had a cheeseburger for dinner. The smell of Muud parasites wafts around his boots, and even a novice right out of the Portal recognizes the stench. He owes the city 2500 gold on his shop's taxes. He is wearing a set of greatrobes which were last mended by Fain.



mmmmmMetaphysical.
Unknown2009-06-27 19:30:40
QUOTE (Romertien @ Jun 27 2009, 11:26 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
it's the whole "I'm LOOKing at you, not searching your soul/mind/capability" deal.
Also, even if it's short, it's OK- my description is still unfinished, because I've been too lazy to finish it- it's a whole three lines at the moment. Short is fine!


I've seen a guild that requires you to have a description of at least ten well-written sentences.
Xenthos2009-06-27 22:01:54
QUOTE (Allison @ Jun 27 2009, 03:30 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I've seen a guild that requires you to have a description of at least ten well-written sentences.

In Lusternia?

Which?
Unknown2009-06-28 01:11:41
QUOTE (Allison @ Jun 27 2009, 12:30 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I've seen a guild that requires you to have a description of at least ten well-written sentences.

Oh look, another post* where you judge us based on your experiences with IRE's unfortunate miscarriages. It's supposed to work the other way around.

*I saw two in about two minutes, so I assume there's a dozen more somewhere. I hope?
Unknown2009-06-28 18:49:35
QUOTE (Azoth Nae'blis @ Jun 27 2009, 09:11 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Oh look, another post* where you judge us based on your experiences with IRE's unfortunate miscarriages. It's supposed to work the other way around.

*I saw two in about two minutes, so I assume there's a dozen more somewhere. I hope?


Why don't you go write about it in your Livejournal?
Unknown2009-06-29 03:59:18
He is a fierce dracnari and dwells within an aged hide marked in an intricate web of tattooing, stylized pathways of ebon thorns and azure roses tracing their way between sinew and synapse visible beneath his dulling scales. His form is favorably comparable to that of a snake given humanoid shape, the full length of his body from snout-tip to tail-tip a nie seamless extension of itself, four lithe limbs stretching out to end in four-fingered paws dissimilar only in their frequency of contact with the ground. A thick mane of ivory fur-like spines wreath his forever-smiling visage, a reminder of a blended heritage, tracing twin paths down chest and back to meet up once more and completely clothe his tail in monochrome. Smaller signs echo a more canine history, in black-rimmed eyes of gold and twitching ears, though the presence of his finely manicured horns remains inexplicable. ----- Easily missed by the casual observer, two sets of subtle scars hint at a more jaded existence. The foremost of these hide amongst the ink upon his left arm, curiously precise in patterning and fresh in tissue as if through a fairly regular surgical act. The latter crafted by far less skill, snaking down the length of the sternum, oft lost between the white strands that border it. -----

I tend towards long desc. it would seem (Once got the 'max length exceeded' error for an older one). Regardless.
Unknown2009-06-29 04:15:25
QUOTE (Maellio @ Jun 28 2009, 10:59 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
He is a fierce dracnari and dwells within an aged hide marked in an intricate web of tattooing, stylized pathways of ebon thorns and azure roses tracing their way between sinew and synapse visible beneath his dulling scales. His form is favorably comparable to that of a snake given humanoid shape, the full length of his body from snout-tip to tail-tip a nie seamless extension of itself, four lithe limbs stretching out to end in four-fingered paws dissimilar only in their frequency of contact with the ground. A thick mane of ivory fur-like spines wreath his forever-smiling visage, a reminder of a blended heritage, tracing twin paths down chest and back to meet up once more and completely clothe his tail in monochrome. Smaller signs echo a more canine history, in black-rimmed eyes of gold and twitching ears, though the presence of his finely manicured horns remains inexplicable. ----- Easily missed by the casual observer, two sets of subtle scars hint at a more jaded existence. The foremost of these hide amongst the ink upon his left arm, curiously precise in patterning and fresh in tissue as if through a fairly regular surgical act. The latter crafted by far less skill, snaking down the length of the sternum, oft lost between the white strands that border it. -----


I do not think that it is physically possible for synapses to be visable. Possibly there should be an article before sinew. Nie to Nigh. Insert is before crafted and after latter in the last sentance.
Unknown2009-07-05 05:40:06
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He is a an ordinary human and is one with a slight elfen heritage, bearing a height of about five feet and five inches, bronze-like tanned skin covering him from head to toe, dark, yet not too excessive. On his face lie two sharp, green eyes, his long eyelashes accentuating them, making the corners of his eyes seem sharper. His other facial features are prominent yet soft, from his slightly angled nose, to his obviously pointed ears. His lips are dry, slightly chapped, with pearly white teeth contained within, his left canine slightly elongated and considerably sharp. His dark crimson hair is grown quite long, naturally angled, the tips of his hair converging to form spikes. His bangs are parted evenly at the middle of his face, brushed up and then down to his jaw line. His hair is tucked behind his ears, cascading down messily, scattered over his shoulders. Going down from his neck, his collarbones are easily visible as his shoulders broaden slightly. His arms are smoothly muscled, though not bulky, but their definition easily seen. His chest has minimal definition, flat, brown nipples resting on them. Down the flat plane of his belly, his abdomen is quite toned, a four pack easily visible on it. His prominent hipbones mark his quite small waistline and where the 'v' heading down to his pelvis begins. His torso is practically hairless, aside from a light, barely visible trail of dark red hair beginning under his navel, going down.


Would that make a good description for a Seren Spiritsinger?
Unknown2009-07-15 06:51:10
Nipples, groins and chest hair should not be described on male characters for much the same reasons why they should not be described on female characters.
Aenea2009-07-17 09:17:52
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She is a fiendish viscanti and is standing around five foot five, skin of a greying purple hue stretches over her toned frame. Crow black hair falling with slight, soft waves, cascades down her shoulders and back in a waterfall of silken darkness. It parts in the centre, elegantly framing her angular features. Out of this mass two pale, thin protrusions curve their way from above and behind her slanted, pointed ears, to the front of her head, stopping shy of covering either eye. Pools of burnt yellow and garnet red swirl within the iris of each almond shaped eye, framed by a thick row of darkened lashes, each eyelid dusted in onyx. Feminine, thin shoulders, between which rest two less-than-impressive leathery wings, taper out to willowy arms, fingers ended in wickedly sharpened claws. A thin, whip like tail hovers about behind her, its end also covered in wickedly sharpened barbs.



yes? no? maybe? smile.gif
Unknown2009-07-17 11:34:20
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She is a fiendish viscanti and is standing at around five foot five, skin of a greying purple hue stretching over her toned frame. Silken hair as black as a crow's feathers cascade down her shoulders and back in soft, gentle waves, its center elegantly framing the angled features of her face. Two horns of pure ivory protrude from the dark mass of hair, curving around her sharp, slanted ears towards the front of her face, stopping at the corner of each of her eyes. Her almond shaped eyes are aswirl with shades of dark, yellow topaz and crimson red garnet, framed gracefully with a thick row of dark eyelashes. Thin shoulders, which between rest two savagely primitive leather wings, taper out to willowy arms whose fingers end in lethally sharpened claws. A thin tail hovers about behind her, whip-like as its end is covered in numerous sharp barbs.


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Unknown2009-08-04 21:28:45
"He is a menacing orclach and stands at a solid 8 feet tall. His skin is a dark
grey color, stretching over his extremely muscular frame with small cracks and
flaws marking its surface in some areas. His face could possibly be described as
handsome, with a strong, broad jaw and a generally well sculpted facial
structure, though his nose is somewhat knobby. Two small, tusk-like teeth
protrude out and upward from under his lower lip. Eyes of light grey rest in his
sockets, carrying with them the gleam of an intelligence that one might not
expect of his race. Short, nearly buzzed black hair covers his head, with long
bushy sideburns growing down his jaw-line and stopping several inches short of
his chin. Despite his imposing physical stature, he exudes a sense of almost
welcoming warmth to those around him."


So, what needs improvement, if anything?
Aerotan2009-08-08 11:04:22
QUOTE (Grinash @ Aug 4 2009, 02:28 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
"He is a menacing orclach and stands at a solid 8 feet tall. His skin is a dark
grey color, stretching over his extremely muscular frame with small cracks and
flaws marking its surface in some areas. His face could possibly be described as
handsome, with a strong, broad jaw and a hard facial structure, marred only by a
nose that seems perpetually swollen and knobby. Two small, tusk-like teeth
protrude out and upward from under his lower lip. Eyes of light grey rest in his
sockets, carrying with them the gleam of an intelligence that one might not
expect of his race. Very short, nearly uniform black hair covers his head, with long,
bushy sideburns growing down his jaw-line and stopping several inches short of
his chin. Despite his imposing physical stature, he exudes a sense of almost
paradoxically welcoming warmth to those around him."

Not sure what you're going for, really, but I cleaned up where I could.

Also, Imma leave this here, if anyone wants to take a crack at making his base creature more apparent
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He is a bouncing furrikin and is covered from large, pointed ears, to the tips of clawed toes in a fine brown fur. His snout is pointed and blunt, and his eyes large and keen. Two small fangs peek over his lower lip, their points only just visible. When he opens his mouth, more fangs and teeth become apparent, though these are much smaller. Stretching from his wrists to the base of his tiny tail are two thick membranes of skin, forming vestigal wings. He is wearing an etched ruby ring, an etched coral ring, a diamond hummingbird ring, an etched garnet ring, a thin amethyst band, and a silver torc.
Unknown2009-08-08 11:51:34
METAPHYSICAL! jumpfire.gif TAKE IT OFF.

Edit: Arpee it so people get to know you. It kinda sucks if you think about it that people know who you are with one look. You go like, oh, see that guy. He's really evil... And this guy if from Celest but will defect eventually :/

Make custom emotes, ArPee eeet out. jumpfire.gif

Edit2: *just sounded like an "ArPee Hor"*
Kyoko2009-08-08 21:10:42
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I wanna try!


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She is a feathered trill and stands at a height of roughly five feet. She has ethereal amber eyes and a long wave of light blue hair, most likely coming from a human parent. Her wings are still maturing, but seem to glow every so slightly with their golden color. She is wearing a canvas backpack, a dapper black dress coat with tails, a pair of glittering black high-heeled shoes, an elegant emerald coloured dress hat, a chain of beryl and garnet links, cropped violet leather pants, and a sapphire winged necklace.




Talk about nondescript xDD