Also, jewelry and clothing in your description is bad.

She is an ordinary undead human and is a graceful, slender woman of five foot, her skin a gentle cream colour marred only by one scar down her neck. Her hair is a deep ebony colour, swept up into many intricate braids. A few whisps of rebelious hair float down, framing her delicate heart-shaped face, and she often tucks them back behind her slightly pointed ears. Her face is pretty for her race; beneath gently arched eyebrows sit her large high swept, amethyst eyes. Her pupils are pitch black, surrounded by flecks of ice blue, giving her eyes a slightly alien look to them. The rest of her face has angular set features with high cheekbones. Her full lips are her most noticeable feature, painted a sickly blood red colour. Her frame is athletic and toned, with a bit more of a wiry musculature than the average human, though she is not without soft womanly curves, starting with her full chest down to a small waist and feminine hips.

She is an ordinary undead human and is a graceful, slender woman of five foot, her skin a gentle cream colour marred only by one scar down her neck. Her hair is a deep ebony colour, swept up into many intricate braids. A few wisps of rebellious hair float down, framing her delicate heart-shaped face, and she often tucks them back behind her slightly pointed ears. Her face is pretty for her race; beneath gently arched eyebrows sit her large high swept, amethyst eyes. Her pupils are pitch black, surrounded by flecks of ice blue, giving her eyes a slightly alien look to them. The rest of her face has angular set features with high cheekbones. Her full lips are her most noticeable feature, painted a sickly blood red colour. Her frame is athletic and toned, with a bit more of a wiry musculature than the average human, though she is not without soft womanly curves, starting with her full chest down to a small waist and feminine hips.

Except 4th grade level adjectives are perfectly fine. I don't mean be overly simplistic, I mean don't be overly complex.

The following is just my opinion and should be treated as such:

TOO COMPLEX: "She is a human and is a tall and proud being, a perfect monument of flesh and muscle standing amongst the crowd that bustles beneath her. Her frame is lissome and supple, with limbs like willowy branches, coated with fine, wiry musculature. Soft tresses of hair, locks of a most luxurious and silky chestnut hue, make their way down the curve of her back to fall at the very midpoint, her fringe masking the radiant, mystical orbs of mahogany that are as pools of sweet milk chocolate set into her warm visage. "

JUST RIGHT: "She is a human and is of greater than average height with a lithe figure. Deep brown hair falls to her back, framing eyes of an equally deep hue."

TOO SIMPLE: "She is a human and is tall and skinny. She has brown hair and brown eyes."

The "too complex" is way too fluffy and overdramatic, not to mention annoying to read. The "too simple" is short and clunky. The "just right" combines both fluff and brevity to form an easy to read, yet detailed description.

Overly complex for the sake of being overly complex is what Howard Phillips Lovecraft was all about. It's our right - goddamnit, our duty - to uphold the aureate, byzantine prosaicism he embodied. Bestir yourself, Lovecraft enthusiasts! This is our time!

Your "just right" one isn't very descriptive.

Enough, back on topic, thank you.

No.

You have to have facial features, the mechanics of the game make it so. Ears and eyes can be lost, I think noses can be broken, and you can cough up blood, so you have to have those.