Ooh, good point! I hadn't thought of that. Mmmm, merian fillets... ooh, I don't have to cook it, either! I love sushi!

I'm in a desc-writing mood. Anyone need help?

I've been having some troubles with mine. I'm not sure if you mean just reviewing desc.'s or just making some, so I'll give you Wick's concept if you have the latter in mind. Wick is a solitary fellow, fond of rivers and freshwater, and modeled partially after west coast American Indian tribes like the Tlingit and Haida and partially after African tribesmen, like the Maasai. He's tall, as an Igasho, and not stunningly beautiful. Brown hair, wiry build, etc... Don't take my sig as a depiction, I totally half-assed it

If I'm wrong let me know!

She is an ordinary human and stands with a rigorously taut form, her sleek build lending to an adroit silhouette. The pigment of her skin is an exotic pale violet, denoting a half breed heritage - latticed veins run along the contours of her lithe features. Deep carnelian eyes stare focused and ready, steeled from any potential distractions. Strands of gossamer white hair spills freely down to her back, revealing a pair of sharply pointed ears. Inscribed on her forehead is an argent pentacle of flames. She is wearing a canvas backpack, a midnight black cloak, a pair of riding trousers, thick leather footwrap-style boots, a rich, courtly red velvet tunic, a silver tiger ring, a beryl sun ring, a simple ring of bloodstone, a rustic ring of blossoms, and a crystal gold ring

Hrm. I rather like this! Though I would change the order of some things... but don't pay much attention to me, heh.

"He is a noble merian and has a lanky frame, standing at a height of only five feet. Shimmering diamond-shaped scales cover his body in alternating hues of royal purple and regalia, which lightens to a deep violet along his fins, and accented by bright flecks of aquamarine. The largest of the beautiful scales decorate him mid-limb and torso, gradually tapering with the tiniest being at his joints, sparkling brightly as he moves. A pair of violet fins half-moon along the entire side of each arm, flaring with the flex of muscle. Deep set, strong eyes of ice blue crown a pair of high-boned cheeks, while his short, curved nose sits atop a pair of reddish lips, tinted with blue and curling into a smile that reveals a sharp row of pearly whites. His scaled head is bare, save for a single dorsal fin that runs from the crown all the way down to his lower back. Where that fin ends, a vibrant crowntail begins in deep purple, fading out into the frilled edges of vibrant aquamarine at his ankles. Holding himself proudly despite his small stature, he has a sort of grace about him in his movement."

Hrm. Not sure if I like my version though...

Okies, I, for some reason, cannot seem to write desc. (not that I could to begin with!) Hopefully, someone could tweak this...

she is an ordinary human and stands roughly around five feet and six inches. Her slender body is boyish in figure, with little to no curves. Her pale face is her only real feminine feature, with delicate cheek bones and thick lashes. Her eyes are a rich, deep forest green in hue and often have a sleepy look to them. Tied back in a loose braid, her thick, golden brown hair falls down to the back of her knees.

describe self appears unaware of the profound effect his height has upon those who must crane their necks to meet his eye. Towering at an even eight feet, made more pronounced by a practised upright posture, it is easy to imagine him bent nearly double to accommodate doors tailored to the smaller races. At best deemed engaging rather than traditionally handsome, his features are smooth despite giving the impression of subtle asymmetry, possibly perpetuated by the blunt button nose whose bridge bears the mark of a long-healed break. Thinly lidded eyes, turned up slightly at the outer corners, and a solemn, dark-lipped mouth round out the visage. Entirely covered in a coarse, mahagony fur liberally dusted with lighter copper tones, he nevertheless appears well-groomed and in possession of a wiry, well-toned frame. Upon both forearms, the pelt so thick upon the rest of his torso is considerably thinned - beneath the thinner layer of hair, tribal markings of a deep rust have been etched upon the skin and expand in arcing whorls and strikes from wrist to elbow. His head is similarly devoid of the consuming insulation of fur, instead covered with downy hairs upon his face and jaw and crowned with a tamed mane of shoulder-length chestnut locks.


You can easily cut this down, but I thought I'd give you what I traditionally deem my 'first draft' - where I start before chopping out unnecessary bits.

My pig needs some help. I just stuck in the basics, pushed the sentences together and ended up with a compilation of snippets that don't flow well at all.

She is a bouncing furrikin and possesses bristly, leathery flesh of a somewhat
pinkish hue. Clearly very overfed, she teeters around on short legs and cloven
hooves that seem far too small to support her weight. A pair of triangular ears
wiggle freely at either side of her head. Between two remarkably plump and
swollen cheeks is a protruding snout with oversized nostrils. Jutting out from
the sides of her large mouth are two curved tusks with shimmering gold ribbons
tied around them. A curly corkscrew tail springs out from a tiny slit in the
back of her current garment.

Hrm. I always describe: height, weight (sometimes just in "chubby, skinny, etc"), hair length and colour, eyes and their overall appearance, any tattoos or scars (for example, one of my characters had a black dragon tattoo over one side of her face), any physical disabilities, overall appearance (proud, nervous, twitchy, etc), lips and nose, ears... etc. I may have forgotten some of the details though.

I actually felt a bit of a need add a bit to tailor it more to Wick's background and personality. Critique my second draft?

describe self appears unaware of the profound effect his height has upon those who must crane their necks to meet his eye. Towering at an even eight feet, made more pronounced by a practiced upright posture, it is clear that he would need to hold himself bent nearly double to accommodate doors tailored to the smaller races. At best deemed engaging rather than traditionally handsome, his features are smooth despite giving the impression of subtle asymmetry, possibly perpetuated by the wide, slightly bent nose whose septum is pierced by a curved, intricately carved piercing of fish bone. These exquisite variations of scrimshaw similarly adorn the rest of his face, gracing his bottom lip, ears, and right eyebrow. Bright green eyes, turned up slightly at the outer corners, and a solemn, thin-lipped mouth round out the visage. Entirely covered in a coarse, mahogany fur liberally dusted with lighter copper tones, he nonetheless appears well-groomed and in possession of a wiry, powerful frame. Upon both forearms, the pelt so thick upon the rest of his torso is considerably thinned - beneath the thinner layer of hair, stylized ritual scars have been etched into the skin and expand in arcing, flowing whorls and strikes from wrist to elbow. His head is similarly devoid of the consuming insulation of fur, instead covered with downy hairs upon his face and jaw and crowned with a carefully tamed, intricately braided mane of shoulder-length chestnut locks.

Ok, so after browsing through pictures of models to get some visual aid in writing a desc. for my lil person I am having trouble writing.... ;-; I was hoping to base her desc. off of this lovely lady. If anyone could write something for me, I'd be grateful. My muse and writing skillz just ain't working for me.

Daaaaamn. She is HOT. Try starting with this as a prompt: (I can't seem to finish it, but that's because I don't really know the character)

and stands at about 5'6". Deep, crystal eyes of pale gray peer out from under shiny, wavy brown hair that comes to rest at its full length mid-back. Pouty lips just below a small, feminine nose, curve slightly into a smile as she talks. Her build is slight but she has a strong appearance.

Actually, you've got some really nice ideas there that I like. Just might make your changes. Thank you very much for the input!

This is for Zayden. He's a loboshigaru Paladin.

describe self has a nervous fidget constantly. Standing at 4'11", he is short for his race but still has a strong look about him. Despite his youthfulness, his dark tree bark coloured eyes are hard, almost cold but not quite as you see compassion within them too. His forehead has already begin to gain a few small wrinkles, as has the area around his eyes when he smiles. A doglike nose rests just above humanoid, pinkish lips that open to reveal large, canine teeth that look capable of breaking bones. A whitish scar streaks across his snout, clean and thin, and a small tattoo of two interlocked, crisscrossing swords has been applied in black ink to the corner of his left eye. His ears come up into points with the same shape as a wolf's, the fur on the inside a honey coloured streaked with dark brown, while the outer ear is a mix of brown and black. The short, straight fur along his body has a base colour of dark brown, but along his head and torso there are streaks of black, and across his face it is patterned in symmetrical streaks of caramel. His hands are shaped the same as humans, with the exception of nails being replaced with claws, with larger claws on his furry, doggish feet. Stretching down along his arms and legs are natural white highlights and black lowlights, finishing on his hands and feet with night-sky black. His tail is brown and tipped in black, similarly to the tail of a fox's. Overall, it can be said that Zayden is more dog than human in appearance, but one cannot only be judged by their looks.

These have all been written for Aeral:

Original (age 16-22 ish):
describe self holds herself proudly. As she stands here, she vibrates slightly, as if controlling the urge to bounce up and down. Her icy blue scales are pale and tinted with peach, a sharp contrast to her shoulder-length midnight hair, both tributes to her human heritage. Her nose defines her as merian, however, with the tiny scales covering the bottom, and stretching out to the gills along her neck, just below full lips that reveal sharp, wolflike teeth, an indication of descent from loboshigaru. Her clear turquoise eyes are constantly sparkling with mischief, but also darting around warily. She is tall for her race and gender, towering at approximately 6'5", and leans toward the chubby side, but is overall well toned. Rounded breasts indicate her just emerging from youth and into full adulthood, as do the arrangements of her scales. Under her clothing you can see the patterns of large, hexagonal shaped scales on her front and back torso, gradually tapering in size at her neck and waist. Her face, hands and feet feature tiny scales, so smooth that they appear like the skin of a human, while her arms and legs have medium sized diamond shapes, growing small at joints and large mid-limb. Various tiny scars decorate her body, along with three dominant marks across her neck, clean and smooth from the bite of a blade, showing her vulnerability during combat. She stands tall as a strong individual.

Festival of Light costume contest (age 20-21 ish):
describe self has been painted up for the Festival of Light, bright streaks of orange, brown, and tan decorating her scales in symbolism of a proud bird, though what kind it is is debatable. A dot of burnt orange decorates her nose in symbolism of a beak, while the area around her eyes has been outlined with dark brown to give them a brighter appearance, and her lips painted over to blend them in with the rest of her skin. The feathers on her back have been painted in the pattern of folded wings, and her feet are stained a brownish-yellow. However, a little of her blue skin shows from under her makeup, tainting the brightness of the autumn colours and at the same time adding to it, bringing a green tinge into the mix of colours. Her hair has been brought back and braided, feathers and beads tied into the ends of it in the same colours as those upon her skin. Her overall appearance is graceful and flitty, like the bird that she represents.

Unused (was for Festival of Light):
describe self has painted herself in white to look like a rather tall, oversized version of a regal cat of New Celest. Her ears have been somehow tapered to make them more catlike, while her hair has been pulled up into a bun with a tie made of fur, making the three scars on her neck almost dominant. Looking at her skin closely you see tiny, delicate strokes that show individually painted hairs on her skin, making it seem all the more real, as though you could reach out and touch fur. Streaks of black stretch down from the outer corners of each of her turquoise eyes, making them seem slitted, while whiskers have been painted across her face. A dab of pink on her nose has had small details of a feline nose added in to completely transform her face. Her hands have been painted to appear as though she has claws, and the scarf she wears has been tied to her robes as a make-shift tail. Though she may appear to be a cat, her slight clumsiness has not been lost in the transformation, nor has her chubby but well toned build.

Festival of Light closing ceremonies (age 21):
describe self her icy blue scales have been streaked with intricate patterns in gold, silver and dark blue, some symbols of the Holy Supernals, others of the Tide Lords and Ladies, and yet others of the Divine Patrons of New Celest. A small sword, a water droplet, a staff, a lute, and a tarot card all represent the guilds, as a reminder of the diversity of the city. The Star of Celest has been painted in all its glory on her chest just slightly above her breasts, while the symbol of Lady Terentia has been recently tattooed on her shoulder. Across her face drapes a painting of Lady Kintyre, indicating that that she is Aeral's chosen Tide Lady to follow. Small wings have been painted on her ankles, as have larger wings in bright whitish-gold on her back. Where the symbols do not lie, tiny stars of silver or gold have been painted. Spreading across her lower back is a scene of Celestia in all its beauty. Her shoulder-length midnight hair, a tribute to her human heritage, has been done up in a bun so that the entire extent of her paintings can be seen, and also making the tiny scales of her gills more predominant. Her neck has been left alone from the painting as three scars stretch across it, and simply has a small pattern of stars by her left ear. Her full lips have been painted to appear thinner, as though she wishes to remain as modest as possible and simply represent the Light in all its radiance. Her sparkling turquoise eyes have been lined with a dash of some sort of bright silvery substance to highlight them. Along one of her legs, the Tower of Light from the Inner Sea has been painted, and along the other the archway that is seen on the elemental plane of Water. Her hand shows a portrait of Princess Marilynth as she is said to have appeared, a tribute to the rich and sacrificial history of the city. She holds herself proudly, at approximately 6'5", as a representation of New Celest.

I. Love. Descriptions.

My new description written by Aeral that replaced the crappy one I've had for the past 2-3 years.

On the scar part, remove the magic reference. It's more fun for it to be part of your backstory and explain it to others rather than force everyone to immediately think "Oh, perhaps that scar is from a botched spell"

On the scar part, remove the magic reference. It's more fun for it to be part of your backstory and explain it to others rather than force everyone to immediately think "Oh, perhaps that scar is from a botched spell"

He is a bouncing furrikin and is covered in soft, cream-coloured fur from the tips of his tall, erect ears, to his black-clawed toes, to his powderpuff of a tail, save for the underside of the tail, which is a snowy white, and a patch of dark brown fur around his right eye and cheek. He's slightly pudgy, though not to the point of being unhealthy, and his fur is all well groomed. His eyes are an emerald green colour, with small flecks of turquoise spread throughout. His upper lip doesn't quite cover his front teeth, which poke over his bottom lip due to a slight overbite.

Not so comfortable with this as his final description. Any suggestions?

Oooooh. I know that tip was aimed at Neos, but thanks. I forgot about that.

Glad I could help