Excellent. I'll start working with that in mind (fine I won't be paisley) - thank you!

I will now be designing a tattoo to make someone paisley.

She is a ferocious loboshigaru fiery demigoddess and her fading black fur is marred by a number of scars that speak of a long history of melee combat. Greying hairs dapple her pelt with the tell-tale silvers of age, but her lean musculature and piercing scarlet gaze banish any misconception of decrepitude. Her posture, hunched and bent-kneed, quivers with energy, with a barely-contained violence just waiting to leap into actuality. Embers smoulder in ashen patches of fur, winking red flames licking at the air and casting thin streamers of smoke about her body. Labyrinthine patterns have been painted onto her arms in blood and soot and sticky resin, marking ruddy complexities, arcing lines and sharp corners into her fur. The patterns keep her arm fur matted, pressed down and cohesive to prevent snags and ward off the grips and grapples of combat. As she breathes, flickering sparks fly from her mouth and nose, falling and dying on a wash of hot air that bends light and ripples vision in its wake.


Not sure if I want to stay Lobo or wear my Taurian hat and be a grumpy moocow...

Go with the grumpy moocow, you've got the RP investment in it.

My turn, my turn! I haven't written a description for something like this in ages, so please, be brutally honest. :wub:

She is a nimble shadowsinger faeling and carries herself with a very humble
demeanor. She is small, not only in height but in frame. Although clearly
feminine through other traits, her body is very slender, with only a slight
curve into a very small waist and over her hips. It is not attractive in a
sensual way, more the mark of not eating as much as she should. Her hair is
dark, complimentary of the night sky, and falls in very soft curls and waves to
her thighs. The strands are light and move easily with her, bouncing lightly
with any subtle motion. Her eyes are reminiscent of the lush pastures, deep and
green. With a small nose and mouth, her face is very youthful, as befits her
age. Wings sprout naturally from her back, the ends of which are soft and wispy,
a bit like feathers although clearly not similar in any other fashion. She is
wearing a canvas backpack, soft, knee-high boots of dove-grey suede and pale
green greatrobes embroidered with musical imagery.

Pardon the ever so slightly necro of the thread, but I didn't feel like making another one, and if someone actually replies here, well, nifty. Anyways, after running around for a while as "She is a regal asalaran and has a slight build" (computer ate the aliases I used to swap between descriptions when I used my cameo, and I'd put that up as a placeholder at one point) I've written another description for Lilija that I'd like some critiquing for. Coloring wise, she's based off a Russian Blue house cat, which I absolutely adore and can't wait to get permission to hunt down one to buy/adopt. Anyways, one with the show I guess.

She is a regal aslaran and posseses a compact body. At a hair under five feet tall, her svelte frame curves slightly to compliment her lack of height and lends an air of feminity to what would otherwise be a boyish form. Vivid bottle green eyes are set in a fine featured face that is tipped with a delicate, feline snout. Slightly off-white teeth and fine wrinkles at the corners of her lips and eyes hint at the age that her otherwise youthful features veil. Her short coating of fine, matte fur wars between being varying shades of blue or gray depending on how light strikes it. Similarly colored, though glossier shoulder length hair tops her head and is pulled back into a loose bun that allows small locks of hair to trail down her neck and face. She is wearing a ridiculous pig nose, the Doctoral Cord of Universal Talents, a green sari embroidered with orchids, classical sandals of soft golden leather, a loboshigaru tribal pack, a thin turquoise band, 2 etched beryl rings, an etched opal ring, a clear ring, an iridescent sea sponge ring, a glittering bubble ring, a playful platypus ring and a flickering kajiyuurei ring. Tattooed on her hands is an illustration of spiralling words of power.

Any suggestions are to improve upon this are welcome.

She is a regal aslaran and posseses a compact body. At a hair under five feet tall, her svelte frame curves slightly to compliment her lack of height and lends an air of feminity to what would otherwise be a boyish form. Vivid bottle green eyes are set in a fine featured face that is tipped with a delicate, feline snout. Slightly off-white teeth and fine wrinkles at the corners of her lips and eyes hint at the age that her otherwise youthful features veil. Her short coating of fine, matte fur wars between being varying shades of blue or gray depending on how light strikes it. Similarly colored, though glossier shoulder length hair tops her head and is pulled back into a loose bun that allows small locks of hair to trail down her neck and face. She is wearing a ridiculous pig nose, the Doctoral Cord of Universal Talents, a green sari embroidered with orchids, classical sandals of soft golden leather, a loboshigaru tribal pack, a thin turquoise band, 2 etched beryl rings, an etched opal ring, a clear ring, an iridescent sea sponge ring, a glittering bubble ring, a playful platypus ring and a flickering kajiyuurei ring. Tattooed on her hands is an illustration of spiralling words of power.

The first things I notice are the spelling errors:

• posseses --> possesses
  
• compliment --> complement (This is a common error. An inanimate object cannot literally lavish praise upon something else, but it can complete/enhance/make something else perfect.)
  
• feminity --> femininity
  

Otherwise I believe the description is well-written and interesting to read. You describe height, build, eyes, fur, and other components of her appearance, such as effects of age, teeth, etc., which is great. Maybe you want to describe her ears as tufted, round, or triangular. Maybe you want to describe her tail, or other feline features she might have. If you want to use "chignon" instead of "bun", that works too. I like the word "chignon".

I blame the poor spelling on it being way past someones bedtime when I wrote the description. As for ears, tail and potentially other feline features, I wanted to avoid an overly large description, so they're what I cut. I'll loo k at adding them in though.