First Person:
You raise a single finger and point off in the distance, sensing the presence of $+target nearby. An eerie light springs forth from your judging hand, forming into a massive beast of incorporeal white light that watches you for a moment before nodding its head and vanishes from sight.

Third Person:
$+Caster raises a single finger and points off into the distance, an expression of sullen calm stretching upon $her face. A massive beast appears for a moment before $+Caster, watching her for a moment before $+caster nods to it, causing it to vanish from sight.

First Person Hit:
A preternatural silence envelops you for a moment before you watch in horror as a massive beast of white light appears before you, its eyes watching you with quiet conviction. Your scream as you fall to your knees before it, feeling the judgement of $+Caster come upon you and finding you guilty before $her eyes.

Third person Hit:
$+Target gasps in shock as $he/$she turns to stare at an empty space before $her/$him. A moment later, a massive beast of white light appears before $him/$her, watching $her/$him with a look of silence upon its face. You watch as the beast turns and leaves, $+target falling to $his/$her knees as their flesh smolders and tears stream from $his/$her eyes.

WorldEcho:
The sound of thunder flashes across the sky, as a massive bolt of white light streaks across the sky.

OR
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First Person:
You bow your head, whispering the name of $+target under your breath. A chorus of whispering voices, echoing $+target's name, surge through the area and vanish into sullen expectation.

Third Person:
$+Caster bows $her head, whispering an inaudible word under $her breath. A pulse of light surrounds $her for a moment, beating like a heart beat, before vanishing into stillness.

WorldEcho:
A surge of crackling white light races through the heavens overhead, whispering a funeral barge as it passes.

First Person Hit:
You turn just in time to see a woman appear in a pulse of light, watching you with an expression of quiet conviction. She touches your chest softly, sending you to your knees as her touch scorches through your body.

Third person:
You turn and gasp with horror as you catch the sight of a woman garbed in pulsing light standing before $+target. Her hand reaches out and touches $+target for a brief moment before vanishing, leaving $+target screaming in pain.

I often smite slow drivers by raising a single finger.

You know, just sayin.

This thread fills me with a mixture of hate and envy.

Shout: Shadowy shapes coalesce across the periphery of your vision as the sibilant voice of Kaervas surges through the aether, "Blah blah blah."

Zap (target): The atmosphere shifts into a stygian haze as a seething cyclone of darkness churns violently around you. Enraged strands of shadow dig agonizingly into your flesh with full force, causing spasms of pain to ripple throughout your body.

Zap (area): A cyclone of shadow rages malevolently across the firmament.

I see Ashai wields the mighty power of thesaurus.com. And multiple agonies.

While it is slightly wordy, it is no where near as bad as a few other things I've seen (Prisch's desc comes to mind immediately).

Bad?

And no, I don't use a thesaurus

Beware the agonies, for they are Legion.

It's not TERRIBLE, but "murderous plethora" is just... ugh. It feels like you plugged in words from a thesaurus, even if you didn't.

And, as far as I know, you can only have a single agony at a time. I also think "violet energy" would make more sense than "violet energies".

I'm sorry for being so nitpicky

I don't know, I like the multiple energies.

Do NOT like the coruscating agonies though.

FINE. *SCRAP ZAP*

Don't you mean 'flourescent scrappings of torn zap'?

I'm teasing.

Pshh, don't hate.
Theres like 2 hard words in there.

I've seen your description. It's where pretentious words go to die.

You still have fabulous hair though.

LOL woe is I.
This is desc intervention now.

I'm goan cut you up so bad, you, you, you ain't even know I goan cut you up so bad.

When you shout, others will hear: A flash of silvery moonlight precedes the soft
sound of crystalline chimes as the voice of Sarrasri echoes, "Blah blah blah."

And the recently approved zap.

Your Custom Zap (Approved):
1 = What you see: "You close your eyes, manifesting your power calmly into an
crescent-shaped bow and a crackling green arrow, loosed from the string as you
focus intently on your prey."
3 = What people in your room see: "As $=(caster$) closes $=(his$) eyes, a
crescent-shaped bow and a crackling green arrow manifests. $+(he$) inhales in
perfect calm as the arrow is loosed, seeking out $=(his$) prey."
1t = What your target sees: "Green encompasses your vision as a crackling
arrow pierces your shoulder, the brief pain followed by a searing agony."
3t = What people in your targets room see: "Green flares around $=(target$) as
a crackling arrow pierces $=(lhis$) shoulder. The surprise on $=(lhis$) face
quickly transforms into searing agony."
Area = What everyone in the same area sees: "You hear the sigh of a bow string
as a crackling green arrow pierces the sky."

I was wondering what that was just now.

finally got my zap approved!!


Your Custom Zap (Approved):
1 = What you see: "Focusing on your bond with Morgfyre, myriad voices whisper the name of $=(target$) and a foul miasma covers you. Laughing, you send a crackling emerald ouroboros flying towards $=(target$). As the disc hits $=(target$), the
voices scream and suddenly fade."
3 = What people in your room see: "$+(caster$) closes $=(his$) eyes as a foul miasma envelops $=(him$). Countless voices can be heard whispering $=(target$)'s name as $=(caster$) unleashes a sickly green ouroboros. The voices scream and suddenly
fade as the serpent hits its mark."
1t = What your target sees: "Madness overcomes you as countless voices whisper your name. You hear $=(caster$)'s laugh as a serpentine emerald ouroboros slams into you, currents of raw power feeding off your life force, heralding the endless hunger
of the Legion."
3t = What people in your targets room see: "$+(target$) suddenly clutches $=(lhis$) head and gibbers with the many voices that call $=(lhis$) name. $=(caster$)'s laugh echoes as a flashing green ouroboros slams into $=(target$). The voices scream
as energy feeds off of $=(target$)'s life force."
Area = What everyone in the same area sees: "The sky becomes clouded with a dull emerald hue as a thousand voices whisper in a chaotic frenzy. The voices scream as a crackling emerald ouroboros is sent through the sky, striking its target."

I feel bad that your zap makes me think of the Dark Mark, Revan